I am a Year 8 student at Panmure Bridge School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Learning Space 2 and my teachers are Mrs Anderson, Ms Naicker and Ms Kirkpatrick.
In my Orientation I started with using sounds. The kind of sounds I used was Grrr! because it based on a bear chasing and scaring us after I wrote it I had t revise my orientation using DRAFT.
Great work Ana. Your orientation clearly explains the setting, characters and problem. Your use of a sound for the hook grabs my attention because I want to find out what is making that noise. Your choice of words and descriptive language helps to enhance the mood and scariness of the bear.
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Great work Ana. Your orientation clearly explains the setting, characters and problem. Your use of a sound for the hook grabs my attention because I want to find out what is making that noise. Your choice of words and descriptive language helps to enhance the mood and scariness of the bear.
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